Monday, January 21, 2013

TECH WRITING: FIXING FRAGMENTS #2


FIX FRAGMENTS #2

HOW DO YOU FIX FRAGMENTS? 
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PART ONE:  Fix the fragments in this passage.        
            Although women's college basketball in Connecticut is a marvelously entertaining and popular sport. It not hard to remember. When it was not so popular. It’s is hard to believe. Only a few years ago, my friends and I to went to a women's basketball game. And we could get seats for free near center court. Especially on Sunday afternoons.
     Of course, that before names such as Rebeccca Lobo, Jenn Rizzotti, and Kara Wolters became household words. Lobo's book, HOME-COURT ADVANTAGE, which she wrote with her mother. A best-seller in Connecticut. If more than a couple of hundred fans showed up for a game. It was considered a big turnout. And games were played in practically silent gyms. Because the fans didn't care who won. Nowadays, it almost impossible to buy tickets to a women's game, and you can't get seats. Unless you know someone.      
       Indeed, who would have predicted ten years ago? That women's basketball so wildly popular? Well, people who have watched the growth of women's basketball in southern states. The enormous campus arenas at the state universities in Tennessee, North Carolina, and Georgia filled to capacity for home games.
      The coach for Tennessee's Lady Vols, Pat Summitt. She has achieved nearly godlike stature in that state. A tall, striking figure on- and off-court. Summitt commands respect. Wherever she goes. My youngest sister, Ruth Ann, who lives in Tennessee. She says you can't near Pat Summitt after a game. "You'd think she a rock star," she says. Although Geno Auriemma, Coach of the UConn women's team. Not yet enjoying that kind of support. He rapidly becoming a widely recognized figure. Because he appears frequently on TV news and sports shows.

Part Two:Fix the fragments
             The boat ride to the island took about 2 hours. Our boat held a lot of tourists.  About thirty people.  As we were cruising.  We could see dolphins in the water.  They started playing with us. Coming very close to the boat. Jumping, flipping, and splashing. We raced with the dolphins. Which was exciting. Even though we lost.  We reached the island’s shore at sunset. Just in time for the luau. We saw a show at the Polynesian Cultural Center.  Dancing and singing in traditional Polynesian costumes. We tasted many local dishes.  I loved all of the foods. Especially the poi. Which is ground up taro root. When it was time to get back on the boat.  I wanted to stay.  Because my first trip to Hawaii was so fun. (12 errors)