MEGA MALL ESSAY REVISION
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THE MEGA Mall
In this essay I will
tell you about my weekend trip. Last
weekend I went to the Mall of Americca in Bloomington, it was really a great
experience. I ain’t gonna be able to
tell you everything about it cuz it was so big.
Shop till you drop at that place!
And you can have a great time on the rides, to.
The Mega Mall has a lot to
offer. It has 3 shopping levels that
forma a big square. Inside the square
their is Snoopyland, a big amusement park with rides. Four large department stores are on the four
corners of the mall. A big movie theater
offers all of the new releases, ther sure is a lot to do.
At Snoopyland in the center of
the mall, you can pretend you’re outside at an amusement park. You can rideon a roller coaster that goes
upside down. Or on a log flume ride that
takes you over a water fall. There are
real trees and plants growing all around you so that that place is like a
park Speciel shows can be seen on a
small stage as well. I seen lots of
other rides for small children, too.
Another intresting place in the
mall is Lego Land. Giant, big legos are
everywhere. There are lego statues of
dinosaurs, animals, machines, and people to see. It’s a very colorful place to see.
In conclusion, the Mall of
america is really a great place to visit.
It offers some thing for everyone.
Have a good time when you goe, remember to bring plenty of money and
comfortable shoes. Youll need both
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