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Mona Lisa Fragments #2

Fragments #2:  Combining Sentences to Fix Fragments

Practice 1:  Connect sentences so there are no fragments.

The Olympic athlete stumbled and collapsed. Running to the finish line. He lost the race by a fraction of a second. But he had almost won. The runner lay motionless. On the track. The next race had to be delayed as the medics checked the runner’s vital signs. For example, heartbeat, respiration, and level of consciousness.

Practice 2:  Mark "S" for sentence.  Mark "F" for fragment.

1.  2.   3.  4.  5.  6.  7.  8.  9.  10.  11.  12.  13.  14.  15.  16.  17.  18.  19.  20.  21.  22.  23.  24.  25.

ASSIGNMENT:  Get rid of all fragments by adding words or combining the sentences.  Take out all the numbers.  Fix the punctuation and capitalization.       

 1. Almost every book on art includes a reproduction of the Mona Lisa.  2. One of the most famous paintings in the world.  3.  The Mona Lisa was painted by Leonardo da Vinci.  4.  Who worked on it for four years (1503-1506).  5.  The painting was never quite finished.  6.  After working for several hours.  7.Leonardo would sit down in front of the Mona Lisa to quiet his nerves.  8.  Some people say that Leonardo did not finish the painting.  9.  Because he wanted an excuse to keep it with him.

           10.  There is a mysterious smile on the face of the woman in the painting.  11.  Which has intrigued people for centuries.  12. Although no one knows the true explanation of the smile.  13.  Several different legends have grown up about it.  14.  One story says that the woman was smiling sadly when she sat for the portrait.  15.  Because her child had died.  16.  Another story, however, goes on to say the Leonardo hired musicians to play during the sittings.  17.  Flutists and violin players.  18. So that he could capture the young woman’s rapt expression.

            19. When Leonardo left Italy and moved to France.  20. He took the painting with him.  21. The French king persuaded him to sell the painting.  22. Which now hangs in the Louvre.  23. An art museum in Paris.

            24.  The Mona Lisa  had been exhibited in several countries.  25.  So that many people can have a chance to see the woman with the mysterious smile.

"A" contract Work - Write a simple paragraph about school.  Include these kinds of fragments in your paragraph:  -ing frag, conjunction frag, preposition frag, and For Example/like frag.

 Then, copy and paste the paragraph below the original one you wrote and fix the fragments.  You will have two versions--an incorrect and a correct version when you are done.

TML BIG NOTES #1

TML BIG NOTES #1 – FOLKTALES

Dakota Legend -

   Setting

   Characters

   Conflict

   Turning Point

   Other Elements

   Theme

The Story of Keesh by Jack London - _

   Setting

   Characters

   Conflict

   Turning Point

   Other Elements

   Theme

How Mosquitoes Came to Be –

   Setting

   Characters

   Conflict

   Turning Point

   Other Elements

   Theme

The Flying Head –

   Setting

   Characters

   Conflict

   Turning Point

   Other Elements

   Theme

The Ash Lad who Had an Eating Contest with a Troll -

   Setting

   Characters

   Conflict

   Turning Point

   Other Elements

   Theme

Windwalker –

   Setting

   Characters

   Conflict

   Turning Point

   Other Elements

   Theme

Comp I - 4 ways to avoid fragments (day 2)

PART A - Make each of the following fragments into sentences by adding words to them.

Example: Because I missed the bus by seconds. (FRAG)
I was twenty minutes late because I missed the bus by seconds. (CORRECT)

1. who broke her glasses
2. because the lights on the stage went out during the performance
3. while Jolene was rehearsing her part
4. who is president of the Student Council
5. after the fish got away
6. that are working on a clean-up campaign for the school
7. if you want to own a pet
8. which were racing across the lake
9. because the library closes at six o’clock
10. whom I met at your party


“A/B” work: Do PART A first. Then, go on to other activities below. 

Part B: Fix the fragments in the sentences below by adding words to them or by connecting them to other sentences. Do not create run-ons.

Although women's college basketball in Connecticut is a marvelously entertaining and popular sport. It not hard to remember. When it was not so popular. Which is hard to believe. Only a few years ago, my friends and I to go to a women's basketball game. And we could get seats for free near center court. Especially on Sunday afternoons. Of course, that before names such as Rebeccca Lobo, Jenn Rizzotti, and Kara Wolters became household words. Lobo's book, HOME-COURT ADVANTAGE, which she wrote with her mother. A best-seller in Connecticut. If more than a couple of hundred fans showed up for a game. It was considered a big turnout. And games were played in practically silent gyms. Because the fans didn't care who won. Nowadays, it almost impossible to buy tickets to a women's game, and you can't get seats. Unless you know someone.

Part C: Find online ads and locate fragments in them. Write the fragments here. (Find as many as you can in the time you have to work today.)

Part 3: Go here and do the practice test. Show the teacher your final score. Click on “Play the Game.”
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Dakota Legend and Conflict

Conflict Notes

Conflict is the colliding or clashing of __, ___, ___, or ___.

There are 5 basic types of conflict:

1.     – One character has a problem with one or more other characters in the story.

2.      – A character has a conflict with society’s expectations of him or it’s traditions.  (Conflict with the Law, at school, etc.)

3.     – A character has trouble deciding what to do in a particular situation.  He struggles within himself to decide.

4.     – A character has a problem with some natural happening:  a snowstorm, an avalanche, a flood, or other element of nature.

5.     – A character has to battle what seems to be an uncontrollable problem--something he cannot change—because of his destiny.

What is the conflict in "Folsom Prison Blues?"  Explain your answer.

Dakota Legend questions

1. According to this legend, where were the Dakota tribes invading?

2.  Who related an account of this story to the author?

3.  Why did the young warrior insist on going to war against the Ojibway people?  Give 2 reasons.

4.  Why did the young bride want her husband to stay and not go to war?

5.  Before the Dakota warrior left his young bride, what did he do besides promise that he would return to her?

6.  How did all the women get ready when the return of their husbands was soon to be expected?

7.  What was the young bride doing when she saw a dark object in the waters of the Mississippi River?

8. How had the young husband kept his promise to his wife?

9.  Explain how this mysterious happening could have occurred.

10. What happened to the young bride in the end of the story?

11.  The setting of this story is in northern Mineesota.  List all the geographical words and phrases in this legend with which you are familiar.

Link for MCA PRACTICE TEST

MCA PRACTICE TEST - READING

Bible Lit - Story of Daniel

Daniel in the Lion's Den

Introduction

Daniel’s story takes place between 605 and 540 B.C. As a teenager, he was captured in Jerusalem and taken to Babylon. He was a slave in the court of King Nebuchadnezzar  In his lifetime, he would serve three kings and become a trusted adviser to all of them. 

Daniel was considered a prophet because the book he wrote contains detailed prophecy about the times following him and the coming of the Messiah and the end times described in the Book of Revelation.

Step I: Go to Bible Gateway and read The Message version (see link below) or use your own Bible to read the story of Daniel in the Lion's Dean. 

This story is about the prophet Daniel who has been taken captive to Babylon. As he grows older, he has found favor with the king, but he still has enemies. You'll find this story in the Book of Daniel, Chapter 6.

Go here to read it in The Message version at Bible Gateway. http://www.biblegateway.com/passage/?search=dan%206;&version=65;

http://www.biblegateway.com/passage/?search=dan%206;&version=65;

Step 2: After you read the story, answer these questions:

1. Why are some people plotting against Daniel? 

2. Describe the character of Daniel. What kind of a person is he? (Write several sentences.)

3. What does Daniel get into trouble for doing? 

     Have you ever gotten into trouble for doing the RIGHT thing? If so, explain.

4. A colloquialism is an expression that is used by a particular culture to express an idea in a colorful way. For example, if I said, "You are pulling my leg," I really mean you are teasing me. Find 2 colloquialisms in The Message version of this story and write them down.

    a.

    b.

5. Look at the famous painting of Daniel in the Lion's Den by Rubens. Describe the facial expression of Daniel in this painting. What seems unusual about the den itself? You can view the painting here. http://www.abcgallery.com/R/rubens/rubens1.html

 

 

6.  What did Daniel, Ruth, and Esther have in common besides their ethnic background?  In other words, what was similar about their character?  Explain. 

Daniel 6

Daniel in the Lions' Den

 1-3 Darius reorganized his kingdom. He appointed one hundred twenty governors to administer all the parts of his realm. Over them were three vice-regents, one of whom was Daniel. The governors reported to the vice-regents, who made sure that everything was in order for the king. But Daniel, brimming with spirit and intelligence, so completely outclassed the other vice-regents and governors that the king decided to put him in charge of the whole kingdom.

 4-5 The vice-regents and governors got together to find some old scandal or skeleton in Daniel's life that they could use against him, but they couldn't dig up anything. He was totally exemplary and trustworthy. They could find no evidence of negligence or misconduct. So they finally gave up and said, "We're never going to find anything against this Daniel unless we can cook up something religious."
 6-7 The vice-regents and governors conspired together and then went to the king and said, "King Darius, live forever! We've convened your vice-regents, governors, and all your leading officials, and have agreed that the king should issue the following decree:
    For the next thirty days no one is to pray to any god or mortal except you, O king. Anyone who disobeys will be thrown into the lions' den.
 8 "Issue this decree, O king, and make it unconditional, as if written in stone like all the laws of the Medes and the Persians."
 9 King Darius signed the decree.
 10 When Daniel learned that the decree had been signed and posted, he continued to pray just as he had always done. His house had windows in the upstairs that opened toward Jerusalem. Three times a day he knelt there in prayer, thanking and praising his God.
 11-12 The conspirators came and found him praying, asking God for help. They went straight to the king and reminded him of the royal decree that he had signed. "Did you not," they said, "sign a decree forbidding anyone to pray to any god or man except you for the next thirty days? And anyone caught doing it would be thrown into the lions' den?"
    "Absolutely," said the king. "Written in stone, like all the laws of the Medes and Persians."
 13 Then they said, "Daniel, one of the Jewish exiles, ignores you, O king, and defies your decree. Three times a day he prays."
 14 At this, the king was very upset and tried his best to get Daniel out of the fix he'd put him in. He worked at it the whole day long.
 15 But then the conspirators were back: "Remember, O king, it's the law of the Medes and Persians that the king's decree can never be changed."
 16 The king caved in and ordered Daniel brought and thrown into the lions' den. But he said to Daniel, "Your God, to whom you are so loyal, is going to get you out of this."
 17 A stone slab was placed over the opening of the den. The king sealed the cover with his signet ring and the signet rings of all his nobles, fixing Daniel's fate.
 18 The king then went back to his palace. He refused supper. He couldn't sleep. He spent the night fasting.
 19-20 At daybreak the king got up and hurried to the lions' den. As he approached the den, he called out anxiously, "Daniel, servant of the living God, has your God, whom you serve so loyally, saved you from the lions?"
 21-22 "O king, live forever!" said Daniel. "My God sent his angel, who closed the mouths of the lions so that they would not hurt me. I've been found innocent before God and also before you, O king. I've done nothing to harm you."
 23 When the king heard these words, he was happy. He ordered Daniel taken up out of the den. When he was hauled up, there wasn't a scratch on him. He had trusted his God.
 24 Then the king commanded that the conspirators who had informed on Daniel be thrown into the lions' den, along with their wives and children. Before they hit the floor, the lions had them in their jaws, tearing them to pieces.
 25-27 King Darius published this proclamation to every race, color, and creed on earth:

    Peace to you! Abundant peace!
         I decree that Daniel's God shall be worshiped and feared
   in all parts of my kingdom.
         He is the living God, world without end. His kingdom
   never falls.
         His rule continues eternally.
         He is a savior and rescuer.
         He performs astonishing miracles in heaven and on earth.
         He saved Daniel from the power of the lions.
 28 From then on, Daniel was treated well during the reign of Darius, and also in the following reign of Cyrus the Persian.

Student Survey

STUDENT SURVEY

What Makes a Good Audience?

What Makes a Good Audience?

KINDS OF DISTRACTIONS

1.    *distractions (i.e., pass to leave or you get called to the office.)

2.    * distractions (You didn’t intend to distract, i.e., coughing, sneezing, or accidentally dropping something.)

3.    *distractions (Trying to tease the speaker on purpose, like making a face at him.)

v 9 Audience Responsibilities

1.    Be *.  That means LISTEN, DON’T SLEEP or play with your iPad or phone!

2.    * the speaker (maintain eye contact), especially if you are not too close to him or her.

3.    * only when appropriate.

4.    Avoid * movements, such as tapping your pen, moving around in your seat, etc.

5.    Never * to someone sitting next to you even if you are only commenting on the speech in a positive way.

6.    Do not * out of your seat unless it is absolutely necessary.

7.    Try to look * because this will give the speaker confidence.

8.    Remember, the speaker will probably interpret your actions and facial expressions in a * way if he or she is nervous.

9.     Always remember, it could be YOU up there, so be NICE!

v DON’T LOSE POINTS!

You will be GRADED as a listener each quarter. 

   You will start with *, but of course, you could lose more than that by distracting the speaker deliberately.

v Watch the “Audiences Behaving Badly” video

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2Mf0v8PlsPs

Journal Entry #2:  How would you feel if you were the student reading the essay?  What were some of the bad audience behaviors going on? Has something like this ever happened to you?  When?  Why is it so important to be a good audience member?  Explain.

SKATING WITH TIPPER essay (Fix paragraphing and Run-ons)

SKATING WITH TIPPER

Directions:  Revise this “essay” so that it no longer has run-ons or fragments.  Subdivide it so that it has correct paragraphing.  Fix any other errors you see.

          Have you ever been humilated and wondered how things got so out of control?  Well, that’s what happened to me recently when a kid considerably younger than I am got the best of me it was the low point of my life.  Last week I decided to go ice skating on a pond behind our house it’s only about a half of a block away so the first thing I did was sort through a messy basement closet to find my skates.  What a joke, what a mess!  That little chore took me twenty minnutes because my mother hid my skates under a pile of old rummage sale stuff that never sold and they were inside a box that was labeled “Christmas” so it seemed like Mom deliberately was playing Hide-and-Seek with me.  When Mom puts my stuff away.  She does it with a vengeance.  (Actually, there’s more to that story, she had told me to put the skates away about ten times and I ignored her.  Then she told me, “You’ll be sorry!”  Rule 1: Never underestimate your mother!)  After I found my skates, hockey stick, and puck, I put on lots of warm clothes and headed towards the pond.  My little nephew Tipper followed me there, I don’t know how he new what I was up to, he lives two houses down from us and I think my mother once again was behind his miraculous appearance.  How is it possible for a kid to just show up with his skates unless someone tipped him off?  Anyway, we both sat down on a log near the pond and put our skates on.  He had brought a hockey stick too, so I figured we could shoot around awhile.  Once we got onto the ice, I noticed it was pretty rough I mean it was very, very bumpy.  Some snow had frozen into it, but I wasn’t about to let that stop me.  Tipper and I started sailing around the pond we tried to avoid the occasional weeds that stuck up through the ice.  This little twerp wasn’t too bad of a skater in fact I hate to admit it, but he was better than I was at dodging weeds of course I could still whack the puck alot harder than he could.  I’m seventeen,Tipper is only ten but I shouldn’t have let that fool me.  The first thing that started to bug the heck out of me was that Tipper started stealing the puck away from me.  Not funny at all.  The first time he did it he giggled hilariously while I could feel my blood pressure rising and my face getting red it wasnt from the cold air either.  I told him to knock it off, he just smiled and grinned, then he said, “Well, why are you so slow?”  Did I mention that this kid is a smart aleck?  The second time he stole the puck from me.  I yanked his blond hair as hard as I could and he went flying across the ice.  I expected him to cry or wine at me and maybe even GO HOME immediately but no, he just giggled some more and started skating around me like I was a dying fish in a shark tank and that really made me mad, mad enough to lose my cool.  I told him, “Why don’t you go to the other end of the pond, and I’ll skate towards you with the puck, and you see if you can take it away again.”  My plan was to skate really fast and slam him with my hockey stick the moment he tried to lunge for my puck, maybe that wasn’t the brightest idea in the world but I wanted vengeance. Because he seemed to be enjoying himself at my expense.  Tipper took the challenge, he skated to the other end of the pond and we stood in face-off positions.  The moment I took off and headed towards him.  He did the same.  We were both skating as fast as we could go towards each other.  Then the moment of my humilation came, Tipper reached out to steal my puck.  And I stretched out my stick to whack the heck out of him.  Unfortunately, there was a small, innocent-looking pond weed sticking up through the ice that was apparently on my nephew’s side. And I didn’t notice that little evil weed. Until it was too late.  My skate blade twisted and I was the one who went hurling across the ice with my face scraping the snow like a plow on a side road.  I looked up in defeat.  As my darling nephew Tipper zipped past me with MY puck gliding along under his control.  He yelled, “Hey, Pokey, you want me to teach you how to skate?”   I didn’t say a word, there was too much snow in my mouth. My leg ached, and my face stung. And it wasn’t just from embarassment. Still, I couldn’t help but wonder, “Is this kid really that good, or did Mom set me up on this one?”  Like I said. Never underestimate your mother.  And never underestimate little kids either.

A- Contract work:  Write a good sentence that is 30 or more words long, but make sure it is NOT a run-on.

Example: Wishing he'd brought his umbrella and dreaming of his nice warm bed, John waited for the city bus for twenty minutes in the rain last Tuesday because his Ford Escort was in the repair shop.

FIX FRAGMENTS #2

FIX FRAGMENTS #2

HOW DO YOU FIX FRAGMENTS? 
1.
2.                          

PART ONE:  Fix the fragments in this passage.        

            Although women's college basketball in Connecticut is a marvelously entertaining and popular sport. It not hard to remember. When it was not so popular. It’s is hard to believe. Only a few years ago, my friends and I to went to a women's basketball game. And we could get seats for free near center court. Especially on Sunday afternoons.
     Of course, that before names such as Rebeccca Lobo, Jenn Rizzotti, and Kara Wolters became household words. Lobo's book, HOME-COURT ADVANTAGE, which she wrote with her mother. A best-seller in Connecticut. If more than a couple of hundred fans showed up for a game. It was considered a big turnout. And games were played in practically silent gyms. Because the fans didn't care who won. Nowadays, it almost impossible to buy tickets to a women's game, and you can't get seats. Unless you know someone.      
       Indeed, who would have predicted ten years ago? That women's basketball so wildly popular? Well, people who have watched the growth of women's basketball in southern states. The enormous campus arenas at the state universities in Tennessee, North Carolina, and Georgia filled to capacity for home games.
      The coach for Tennessee's Lady Vols, Pat Summitt. She has achieved nearly godlike stature in that state. A tall, striking figure on- and off-court. Summitt commands respect. Wherever she goes. My youngest sister, Ruth Ann, who lives in Tennessee. She says you can't near Pat Summitt after a game. "You'd think she a rock star," she says. Although Geno Auriemma, Coach of the UConn women's team. Not yet enjoying that kind of support. He rapidly becoming a widely recognized figure. Because he appears frequently on TV news and sports shows.

Part Two: Fix the fragments

             The boat ride to the island took about 2 hours. Our boat held a lot of tourists.  About thirty people.  As we were cruising.  We could see dolphins in the water.  They started playing with us. Coming very close to the boat. Jumping, flipping, and splashing. We raced with the dolphins. Which was exciting. Even though we lost.  We reached the island’s shore at sunset. Just in time for the luau. We saw a show at the Polynesian Cultural Center.  Dancing and singing in traditional Polynesian costumes. We tasted many local dishes.  I loved all of the foods. Especially the poi. Which is ground up taro root. When it was time to get back on the boat.  I wanted to stay.  Because my first trip to Hawaii was so fun. (12 errors)

Tech Writing - Fix Fragments #1

FIX FRAGMENTS #1     Name: _____________

Part one:  Fix the fragments by combining the sentences or adding words to them.

1.  While I was sleeping. My dog began to bark.
2.  The winter of 2011 is shaping up to be one of the worst on record for several states, 3.  SUNY Rockland has already had several snow days and more storms are on the way.
4.  I stopped at the grocery store to pick up chips and salsa. Before the Super Bowl began.
5.  I enjoy skiing it is my favorite winter sport.
6.  I prefer reading mysteries over romances. Especially mysteries with a paranormal element.

Part Two:  Put these sentences into paragraph form, and get rid of fragments. Get rid of the numbers.

1.  Children receive conflicting messages from a variety of sources.
2.  Which cannot be silenced: teachers, books, friends, and television programs.
We have, from time to time, experimented in this country with limited access to potentially damaging or offensive materials.
3.  Such as books and movies.
4.  But these experiments have not withstood legal challenges.
5.  The courts have decided that Americans have the right to choose what they see or hear and that writers and others have the right to create what they wish.
6.  Although,  certain extreme circumstances, like child pornography, are so offensive and damaging to the children being filmed that as a society we have said that such products are repugnant.
7.  Which is the argument that Charren is making about advertisements directed at children.
8.  But as a society having agreed to limit speech only in the most extreme cases.
9.  There is nothing in the making of advertisements that is as purposefully vulgar or harmful as there is in child pornography.
10.  If anything, advertising more closely resembling the language of our everyday speech.

Part Three:  Combine these sentences to eliminate fragments and make them complete sentences. 

          While only eight microbreweries existed in the United States a decade ago. Today seventy microbreweries are brewing more than 65,000 barrels of specialty beers a year. Microbreweries are winning awards for the tastiness of their products. Which has caused the large producers to alter their production and advertising techniques. Because microbrewery beer is often free of additives. It must be sold locally. Local production, distribution, and advertisting has become a key to microbrewery success. Which depends on creating the perception among buyers of a freshness and healthfulness not available in mass-market beers. Even though image is important. Quality of the product is what has convinced an increasing number of American beer drinkers to buy from local, smaller breweries.