Monday, January 20, 2014

Tech Writing - Fix Fragments #1

FIX FRAGMENTS #1     Name: _____________

Part one:  Fix the fragments by combining the sentences or adding words to them.

1.  While I was sleeping. My dog began to bark.
2.  The winter of 2011 is shaping up to be one of the worst on record for several states, 3.  SUNY Rockland has already had several snow days and more storms are on the way.
4.  I stopped at the grocery store to pick up chips and salsa. Before the Super Bowl began.
5.  I enjoy skiing it is my favorite winter sport.
6.  I prefer reading mysteries over romances. Especially mysteries with a paranormal element.

Part Two:  Put these sentences into paragraph form, and get rid of fragments. Get rid of the numbers.
1.  Children receive conflicting messages from a variety of sources.
2.  Which cannot be silenced: teachers, books, friends, and television programs.
We have, from time to time, experimented in this country with limited access to potentially damaging or offensive materials.
3.  Such as books and movies.
4.  But these experiments have not withstood legal challenges.
5.  The courts have decided that Americans have the right to choose what they see or hear and that writers and others have the right to create what they wish.
6.  Although,  certain extreme circumstances, like child pornography, are so offensive and damaging to the children being filmed that as a society we have said that such products are repugnant.
7.  Which is the argument that Charren is making about advertisements directed at children.
8.  But as a society having agreed to limit speech only in the most extreme cases.
9.  There is nothing in the making of advertisements that is as purposefully vulgar or harmful as there is in child pornography.
10.  If anything, advertising more closely resembling the language of our everyday speech.

Part Three:  Combine these sentences to eliminate fragments and make them complete sentences. 
          While only eight microbreweries existed in the United States a decade ago. Today seventy microbreweries are brewing more than 65,000 barrels of specialty beers a year. Microbreweries are winning awards for the tastiness of their products. Which has caused the large producers to alter their production and advertising techniques. Because microbrewery beer is often free of additives. It must be sold locally. Local production, distribution, and advertisting has become a key to microbrewery success. Which depends on creating the perception among buyers of a freshness and healthfulness not available in mass-market beers. Even though image is important. Quality of the product is what has convinced an increasing number of American beer drinkers to buy from local, smaller breweries.